PROOF READING EXERCISES
The three extracts adapted from PolyU students' FYPs have a number
of errors. Proof read the extracts and find and correct the errors.
1.( Adapted from a Faculty of Communication FYP)
Findings
and analysis
Education distribution
As Table 3.1.2
, all of the respondents of HKPU had an educational level |
reveals |
of University or above. The respondents
of JSHK have a greater
of educational |
variety |
backgrounds ranging
kindergarten/primary to postgraduate. 15% of the |
from |
respondents of JSHK
that they had a secondary educational level, |
reported |
12% of
had attained University level and 10% Post-graduate level. |
them |
Occupational distribution
As table 3.1.3 reveals,
all of the respondents of BALB/BALSB
students. The |
were |
respondents of PgDJSP and JSHK were
all working
. More than half of the |
people |
respondents of PgDJSP
either managers or teachers. The |
were |
group among therespondents of JSHK was 'housewives', followed
by |
largest |
'professionals' and 'clerks'. It
be seen from Table3.1.3 that the respondents |
can |
with different jobs were
evenly distributed in this research. |
quite |
2. ( Adapted from a Faculty of Health & Social Sciences FYP)
Discussion
The mean age among these
patients
compared with the life expectancy at birth |
was |
the Hong Kong SAR in 1998 (statistics from the Hospital Authority). |
in |
The average age of the life of a male
76.9 and a female was 82.2 in 1998. |
was |
However, in this study, the age of death
of the male patient was 71.96 and
female |
the |
was 83.43. |
Although
group of patients suffered from illness, their death age |
this |
large differences from that of the average person. |
did
not show |
The overall findings have shown that
those patients (n=32)
in poor |
- |
physical condition had been clinically
diagnosed as being in the final
of |
stage |
COPD. |
¡@ |
In Table 2, we have
their data with average readings in order to |
compared |
determine whether the date of admission
had be taken as the major prognostic factor or if |
|
there were others. |
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3. ( Adapted from a Faculty of Business Information
Systems FYP)
Urban Cultural Experience
A review of the literature
indicated that backpackers
cultural experience |
preferred |
(Riley, 1987 & Stivala, 1991) and
urban experience such
: hiring a car, |
as |
biking and visiting big towns, attending
live theatre or
, outdoor and folk |
concerts |
museums or historical parks and other
museums. or art
(Loker, 1996). |
galleries |
HKTB emphasized that HK is a cosmopolitan
city; it still
loyal to its |
remains |
cultural roots, ancient customs and
traditions everywhere. Backpackers
visit 11 |
could |
museums in HK
displaying information on pre-colonial heritage and |
- |
and there are nine museums showing education
and entertainment, art, sience
|
science |
and historical
in HK. |
sites |
|